Not to sound like some English teacher, but it needs some fleshing out. Xxx video Unfortunately, some people labelled your story negatively after seeing a few glaring violations and seem to ignore your skill as a storyteller. … It shows a plot and good story-telling skill. 10 comments«12»m1990Report 2016-03-13 15:34:27Love itanimal99Report 2013-03-26 22:38:43if they can’t sign their name to a comment, then they’re just bullying and not offering any real help. 10 comments«12»m1990Report 2016-03-13 15:34:27Love itanimal99Report 2013-03-26 22:38:43if they can’t sign their name to a comment, then they’re just bullying and not offering any real help. I liked yyour story. So fix you mistakes by proofreeading your future stories but don’t let anyone discourage you from writing more stories.anonymous readerReport 2013-03-25 20:41:26Ignore the poster who complains about an “English




















