I give this attempt a 1 out of 10.«12» I give this attempt a 1 out of 10.«12» There was poor plot development and your use of colloquialisms and slang greatly detracted from your story development. I give this attempt a 1 out of 10.«12» 8 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2014-10-24 17:25:37I don’t know who’s talking there’s like three or four people talking and I don’t know who’s whoAnonymous readerReport 2010-06-17 08:47:00He even said Yo… Beeg sex Dude is MEXICANFbaileyReport 2010-06-16 23:42:35Great story keep it goingThe EditorReport 2010-06-16 19:01:33Sorry, but I couldn’t finish reading this “Supposed” story, it was just to difficult to read and understand. Before you try again I recommend that you take some creative writing courses.
