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Is the the girl just really naive, or stupid, or is she trying to seduce her dad?anonymous readerReport 2012-04-10 04:39:18Your story has some good bones. I also fixed it.EfonReport 2012-04-10 10:35:11Needs: Longer, Shorter paragraphs, Better dialog. I also fixed it.EfonReport 2012-04-10 10:35:11Needs: Longer, Shorter paragraphs, Better dialog. I also fixed it.EfonReport 2012-04-10 10:35:11Needs: Longer, Shorter paragraphs, Better dialog. But REALLY make us feel like the characters mean something to us. Is the the girl just really naive, or stupid, or is she trying to seduce her dad?anonymous readerReport 2012-04-10 04:39:18Your story has some good bones. Is Daddy conflicted about doing this or is he a dirty old man?
